NarwhalG2G
They're Red Hot
Join date: Sep 2012
20 IQ
#1
My friends all seemed to compliment this one. It's part of a rock opera I'm working on. I don't really like it but

If tonight was the last time
that my eyes would intertwine
with yours…
If today was the last day
that you’d see my face
well, I just want you to know
that I was a waste
of your time, and you, of mine
And in with the old,
I guess I’m too new
to know what you want
and all about you.
I wish it weren’t true
but my time is due
Why dontcha throw me away?
Because today
will always be too late for tomorrow
and to early for me to say
that I’m…stuck…in yesterday.
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NarwhalG2G
They're Red Hot
Join date: Sep 2012
20 IQ
#2
84 views and nothing said. You guys must really not think too much of this
Quote by KiLLSWiTCH-KnoT
it's like I make threads knowing they're gonna be shit but I make them anyway


Quote by kertets
Wire his sack to the electrical socket the next time, little fucker will be shootin lightening bolts all over the house.
Battery Chicken
Viva la Revolucion!
Join date: Aug 2006
60 IQ
#3
I think they're pretty good. It's always difficult to convey lyrics without a melody. What isn't immediately apparent on paper can make a lot more sense when sung.