You're a
Train wreck
I look for
If I can't
Find one
I'd call it
A day

You can't
Hear me I
Hear you screa
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Last edited by treborillusion at Mar 7, 2013,
This seems like it could have been half a stanza, but pulled out into a full piece. It's a good idea, man. A really good one, but I think you need to take this one back to the forge and give it some more shape.

Keep on with this one, I think I'm going to really like where it goes.