jhymadesh
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Join date: Mar 2010
230 IQ
#1
Hey guys (and girls)

I finished this just a second ago and I thought that it would be good to ask your opinions. Its a acoustic song and I've written it for my girlfriend, we have our two month anniversary this weekend. Haven't been able to come up with a title yet. Any help?


I could watch the fine lines of your face
Fill my time with memorizing all the little stains
I could lay here, next to you, all day
Just to watch you breathe and I’d drift away

Everything outside this room is gone
The world is us, we’re all alone
I’ll cherish these moments as long as I can
Your foolish romantic: that’s what I am

And when I lay alone in my bed at night
I dream of those moments I hold you tight
I picture your face on a background of pillow
And I want you, I crave you, it can’t be too soon no

Everything outside this room is gone
The world is us, we’re all alone
I’ll cherish these moments as long as I can
Your foolish romantic: that’s what I am

Could this be all that I need
Could this be all I’ll ever feel
Never have I felt this way inside
Never have I felt more alive

Everything outside this room is gone
The world is us, we’re all alone
I’ll cherish these moments as long as I can
Your foolish romantic: that’s what I am


Cheers
Scratcher17
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Join date: Apr 2011
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#2
If it's not too chessy for your taste (I know it is for mine), "Your Foolish Romantic" would be an appropriate title.
jhymadesh
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Join date: Mar 2010
230 IQ
#3
See thats also my problem. I dont want something too cheesy
Spambot_2
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#6
I'd use "as long as I can", or "next to you" if you wanna be cheesier than that.

Congratulations on your two-months-versary anyway
Name's Luca.

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#7
"(That's) What I am"
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