Hi There;
I appreciate the music. Good job. Here is my observation. Technically it was well done, and I think you are on the right course to becoming a good guitarist. What's lacking for me was soul and feel. I don't know if that was because you were partially tied to reading or because the tune was more of an exercise and not a journey. I've played with a bunch of guys that can read (it's good to read) but like public speaking, fall on their face when they get tied to the notes.
The players that I think you must like all play very close to the edge. I think with time you will get a little closer to. Good work.