the rhythms could use more variation, the lead intro needs to be expanded. it was going in such a great direction but the change into the rhythm was really disappointing to me. the first lead line could use more variation in rhythm, right now it's pretty static with the half notes. your shredding is very clean and your tone is awesome, you just need to work on phrasing with the slower parts.

Not a bad song, lots of potential, but needs work imo