Bleed Away
th.
Join date: Feb 2006
2,671 IQ
#1
Only this body will I let you reach.
Only my blood will I let you see.
Only God loves you more than me.
Mulbery
doubtfulsalmon
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Join date: Jan 2011
627 IQ
#2
Oh man that last line.

This feels like part of something bigger though, almost an aside from another piece.

Hang on in there, things will get better.
hippieboy444
Registered User
Join date: Apr 2006
7,137 IQ
#3
i agree wtih doubtfulsalmon, this would be a great ending to a longer, multi-part poem.
Bleed Away
th.
Join date: Feb 2006
2,671 IQ
#4
Thanks! Yeah, I agree as well. It was originally meant to be the opening lines to a poem that I wanted to write but, I think it, could very well work as a closer to a poem. I felt very strongly about these three lines, so I used them as a stand-alone. I will most likely come back to this and expand.
Mulbery