It sound alright nothing special and there isn't any riff that really stands out or hooks me. Definitely needs a bridge as it is very repetitive. I reckon it will be a decent metal song (don't do any of that subgenre stuff, its all rock punk metal thrash or deathmetal in the end lol) once youhave a bridge and probably lyrics as it does feel it is missing something probably vox.
My Guitars:
Epiphone Flying V
Westfield SG
Laney Lc15110 230 G Tube Combo 15W
Presonus Audiobox USB

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