#1
So call me again
Pretend that we’re friends
Start talking again
Maybe we could do this every day

I’d be lying if I told you that I didn’t care
Or that I didn’t miss the feeling of your hair
and the moments that were spent in bliss
Maybe you’ll be happy to hear
I called it quits

So call me again
Pretend that we’re friends
Or that everything’s the same
And no ones to blame

And I’d be lying if I said
That I wasn’t scared
Or sadness wasn’t here
Maybe the rain will wash it away

I’ll flip over the frames.
And I’ll keep myself awake
With you to thank
It was a shame

Maybe we could talk about
The clearing of the clouds
After a storm
Or how you left me torn
I’m left to shout
Well what would you do
If I told you
I was a liar.

I wrote this in about half an hour..but I really like it.
I went for kind of a soft/indie feeling in my head, like Brand new.
What do you guys think of it
Last edited by Coheed777 at Nov 16, 2008,
#3
Quote by LedFloyd77
sounds good man... i feel the same


Thanks man.
Sucks doesn't it.
#4
That was really touching,
i liked the flow of the verses, i think you should have that "and i'd be a liar" part a chorus

then it will flow so much better
great man
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1001381
crit mine?
Call me Sean
Quote by Nilpferdkoenig
He's just trying to protect our innocence.


Yes i am
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Your flirting powers are incredible.



Gear:
Schecter S1 Elite Black Cherry (Soapbar Neck, Invader Bridge)
Schecter Banshee
Orange Dual Terror
Boss CE-5
Goatkeeper
#5
Quote by Guitarplaya27
That was really touching,
i liked the flow of the verses, i think you should have that "and i'd be a liar" part a chorus

then it will flow so much better
great man
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1001381
crit mine?


Thanks man, I added two lines at the end, took your idea. Not exactly to the chorus, but you still gave me the iudea. Thanks.


And I'll gladly crit.
#6
Quote by Coheed777
Thanks man, I added two lines at the end, took your idea. Not exactly to the chorus, but you still gave me the iudea. Thanks.


And I'll gladly crit.

Those two lines actually just closed the song perfectly.

Really leaves the person reading hurt, or confused,
as you feel now
nice addition
Call me Sean
Quote by Nilpferdkoenig
He's just trying to protect our innocence.


Yes i am
Quote by :Vicious--

Your flirting powers are incredible.



Gear:
Schecter S1 Elite Black Cherry (Soapbar Neck, Invader Bridge)
Schecter Banshee
Orange Dual Terror
Boss CE-5
Goatkeeper
#7
Quote by Coheed777
Thanks man.
Sucks doesn't it.

haha yep... nothing you can do but move on... nice to know were not alone in this...