#1
maybe will become a song.


statistics

all the newsmen with their calloused tongues
are spitting words out like blood.
A drunk driver's made a casket of a school bus,
on some old road in Arkansas.
and the rearview's got a noose around an evergreen,
as christmas becomes something make-believe:
when Santa Clause has got a BlackBerry'd jaw,
speaking over the cries of a shopping mall.

and the world's a full liver
and an empty heart.
all polluted rivers, and crashing cars.
when guns are the only givers,
I wish this would fall apart,
today.


and a dead man said there's a statued girl,
with her iced-out heart at the end of the world.
fingertips to her lips, she's an ice-9 pearl,
eyes to gods that didn't save her.
and the Nordics had their living tree;
the Buddhists their dharma, their Bodhi.
well, we've got Jesus on TV
and still don't know who killed Kennedy.
so let's hope for a happy ending, to this tragic world.
and keep your fingers crossed for 2012.
or thumb through gold-leafed pages, for something biblical.
Just please pray it's over soon and well.

the world's a burning book
and an empty cup.
A cutting look, from an ancient mug.
A planet dying,
from a lethal lack of love,
today.
today.
a bleeding brook, a fish on the hook.
A sorry crook, missing everything they took
away.
Away.

Oh, when one death's a tragedy
let's have a million more.
And make it all meaningless,
some unending war.
Killing me, jadedly,
so I don't care no more.
Okay,
it's not okay.
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
Last edited by Fly, Marlowe at Nov 15, 2008,
#5
If you made this a song I'd be happy to sing it.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#7
Quote by DigUpHerBones
If you made this a song I'd be happy to sing it.



excellent! That's what I was hoping for
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
#8
Nice, will be good to hear some more details

And it may sound strange saying 'mall' in a Manc accent.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#9
haha, I agree with Kath. This sounds like the kind of thing I'd write, or sing, or both. Very good, the best from you so far.