#1
Alright so this is my first time posting a song on UG so here it is i guess
let me know what you think please


Shattered Stone


Verse1
I thought that time would be the last,
Present bringing mem'ries from the past
To ease the hurt, I turned to stone
till a ray of light shone through my soul, yeah

Chorus
Now, ya got me weak again
Now, I am break-in
Now, I am fall-in again
Now, I am break-in

Post Chorus
(whispers)

Verse2

As the casings turn to ashes
I expose my mental gashes
and as the mask falls of of me
I find the old wounds start to bleed, oh

Chorus


Bridge

You shattered my own stone prison
You showed me who I am
Fallin through my own mind, now
I am break-ing, again!

Solo and out
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#2
The first verse didn't flow very well

"I thought that time would be the last,
Present bringing mem'ries from the past
To ease the hurt, I turned to stone
till a ray of light shone through my soul, yeah"

instead maybe go with
I thought time would be the last,
to bring the present into the part
to ease my pain, i turned to stone
till a light came down and broke my soul

yes?
other wise it was good
crit mine?
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#3
thanks dude i might change that verse there actually
Quote by altoidwithmelon
You dont lose your virginity, you voluntarily misplace it.

Quote by Ur all $h1t
You should bottle up all of your emotions till they become a problem that requires professional help.
It's good for the economy.

http://groups.ultimate-guitar.com/rabidpitweasels/