#1
We've been together for a long time
We never thought this would end
planned a future, set a destination
we were love bound with out a hesitation

A house i want to go home too
where i get to stay and be with you
go to sleep, set the alarm and wake
wake up to a face i want to see.

This was our happily ever afterrrr
This was our happily ever afterrrr (Higher pitched)

Thats just the first part of it, any criticism or ideas are much appreciated.
#2
Very good, except when I got to this part, "go to sleep, set the alarm and wake/wake up to a face i want to see." That part bothered me because it didn't rhyme and seemed out of place with the rest.

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Last edited by Rockstar729 at Nov 17, 2008,