#1
I just want to talk to you
Let us think this through
This is between us two
Il love you through and through

Lets take this slow
I don’t want to know
Where I’l See you go
When you leave me

Sounds good? Yay or nay?
#3
Ok I have an issue with the rhyming. I like the second part of it, how the rhymes go AAAB if you know what I mean. The first part's a bit overdone- I'd suggest changing the 'I'll love you through and through' line, so it's more like the second part. But that's just me.
#4
Ya, im thinking of changing the last line in the first one to

"This is my final plea"

And check out my other post too, even if it is a piece in the works :P
#6
reported for title, in case you were wondering.

There's a thread in the techniques sub-forum that you can post this in, called the "is this worth developing?" thread. Post it there.
Last edited by Ninjamonkey767 at Nov 17, 2008,