I'm working on this song, and I may need a little help... It's a slow song. Like Home Sweet Home by Peter Gabriel. Or something like that.

"When the load gets too heavy,
And your horse comes to a stop.
You take off a few things,
And keep the cream of the crop.
And when you feel ice underneath your feet,
You try to take a stop.
Remember, everyone has their price, Kim-
And yours was just one mock.

And my sorrow and my pain,
They feel independent from my mind.
See the bloody stain, you know
What you've left behind.
And maybe some other day,
You'll get past that daily grind.
Try to remember what you're lost in-
Was it thought, or was it time?"

I need to figure out another verse and maybe a chorus... Any suggestions for what they should be?
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