#1
Heres the first bit, kind of a first draft type deal. Let me know what you think.

Fall deep and fast, further down
Even a king will give up his crown.
Here amidst the breaking dawn
A doe will leave it's newborn fawn.
All that's beautiful will not stay
All we have is here, now, today.
For a wounded man shall say to his assailant, "if I live I will kill you."
"If I die, you are forgiven."
Such is the rule of honour.
#2
I think it's great except "Even a king will give up his crown."
It doesn't really keep it smooth in my opinion.

is it allowed to name your thread like that btw? Cheers...
Last edited by GregNL at Nov 18, 2008,
#3
Please read the rules of the forum before posting. You can post this again once you've done that.
This is not a pipe