Well, the recording was so bad I couldn't listen for long as it was making my ears bleed. Sounded ok, but a bit generic, and I wasn't a fan of the vocals to be honest. How did you record this?
There is poetry in despair.
Its got life. The drums are really solid and the guitar fits well. In terms of criticism i think the could use some urgency every once in a while, otherwise it stars to drone. Also you should mess around a little and experiment with the structure. If you listen to enough music from the genre you can predict whats gonna come next a lotta times - throw us a curveball somewhere in there, explode.