#1
hey guys! this is my second post here and was hoping that some one could give it a quick crit please crit4crit of course.


Break Free.


It’s been a while since we last met,
It’s been a while since you last called,
And I’m wondering where you are.

It’s been a while since I had a good day,
It’s been a while since things go my way,
And I wonder if my life is just a game.

If I could just break free,
This world would be for me,
If I could just break free,
I’m where I want to be.

It’s been a while; I can’t remember the colour of your eyes,
It’s been a while since the laughter died,
And I’m wondering where we’ll go from here.

I hope that you’ll see me and remember,
All the things we shared together,
Come running back; tell me you’ll love me forever.
#2
ir i were you would put back up vocals singing sthing like (I want to break free) with a freddy mercury like voice xD
#3
thanks for your crit on my lyrics first.
Your lyrics seem so standart to me. It feels like anyone could have written it. It just doesn't look like something special to me. I don't know if it's based on something that's happened to you but I guess so. I'm kind of missing some personality.

But since I really don't know much about lyrics my crit could just be bull****.
#4
"It’s been a while since things go my way"

Keep the tense the same throughout.

"It's been a while since things went my way"
Is what I think you mean.