#1
This is the first song of me I've written, recorded, and sang to. This is the first time I really took a shot at singing so let me know what you think.

http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/DiveRightIn63/

Edit: Guh, didn't notice it but my monotone (supposed to be backup vocals) are way louder than intended.
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#3
i like it, the back up vocals add to the song, but you should sing not talk (=

nice lyrics too
#4
I made them in GP and put them in Reason. I forgot to record real drums to it haha.

And yeah, I know that part sounds bad.. Not sure how else to do it.
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#5
I rather enjoyed that. I felt the intro was a bit overdone though, by the time the first drums came in I was waiting for the first verse to come in instead. Your vocals are a little dry, and it really seperates from the backing music, good lyrics though.

Oh, and the irony - Both our songs have the same chord sequences!
#6
Quote by gallagher2006
I rather enjoyed that. I felt the intro was a bit overdone though, by the time the first drums came in I was waiting for the first verse to come in instead. Your vocals are a little dry, and it really seperates from the backing music, good lyrics though.

Oh, and the irony - Both our songs have the same chord sequences!


yeah the intro was actually going to be the intro to the CD itself and I just included it in the song file.

what do you mean by 'dry'?
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#7
Quote by DiveRightIn63
yeah the intro was actually going to be the intro to the CD itself and I just included it in the song file.

what do you mean by 'dry'?


The production on the vocals doesn't match the processed sound of the backing track. A bit of reverb on them will improve them significantly
#8
Quote by gallagher2006
The production on the vocals doesn't match the processed sound of the backing track. A bit of reverb on them will improve them significantly


Oh, yeah I agree. I didn't do much mixing work with the vocals seeing as I don't really know how to work with vocal production. I was actually gonna post in the recording forum later.
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#9
the voice wasn't so great, but i got the just of it. if this was a live production, i'd be amazed, you sound alot like tom delonge, in a good way!

9/10 and yes, reverb would help drastically.
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