#1
this is my first song - i wrote the lyrics over this weekend with a friend-

I'll have my face to the ground
Waiting for you to come around
And I'll watch you fall again
Looking for a new best friend
But I know that you'll be back
Back to keep right on track

So find another story to tell
'coz I know too damn well
But it doesn't matter anymore
So just forget it all

You've wasted all of my life
And I'm waiting for the next surprise
So why not at least try
'Coz I know that this is all just a lie

So find another story to tell
'coz I know too damn well
But it doesn't matter anymore
So just forget it all

And you'll fall time and time again

So find another story to tell
'coz I know too damn well
But it doesn't matter anymore
So just forget it all
Last edited by skateordie24f at Nov 25, 2008,
#3
Not bad, not bad but you could use a bigger vocab when you write your lyrics, just writing using a thesaurus to find different words to break away from sounding generic.

Otherwise, a nice start!
#5
This was a great start. You evidently have some strong ideas and a consistent flow. It sounds to me like a fun alternative song. I do agree with Fierce. You might want to look at a thesaurus, but it might ruin the fun vibe the piece has. It's up to you. I enjoyed it and I'd like to hear it some time. Have a good one and keep writing. I'd like to see some more.
#6
i write the lyrics, but i can't sing and i'm looking for a singer. Hard to find when your in the middle of nowhere