#1
This is my first song lyric i wrote. i hope you'll enjoy it it and i'd love to hear your comments.


From Dream To Reality

It's the desire
longing for our meeting
It's lonyless
Staring back at me
and thinking
Why didn't i make a move,
Why am i so scared?
am i this shallow,
or am i just afraid
to say what i believe


If i had this chanche,
to speak up my mind.
I'd be yours forever,
I would hold on tight.
But it's the doubt in myself
That makes me grief
Will i be yours forever,
or will i live in disbelieve


I had a chanchee
To tell you how i feel
But your surrounding me
makes me nervous
just enough not to speak

I'm anxious for the time
we'd be together
Will i say the wright things
I don't want you to hate me forever


If i had this chanche,
to speak up my mind.
I'd be yours forever,
I would hold on tight.
But it's the doubt in myself
That makes me grief
Will i be yours forever,
or will i live in disbelieve


I keep on dreaming
How it would be
But it always turns out wrong
theres something inside
it is keeping you from me

One day it wont find me
the lonelyness
Will let me be free
and I'll stay forever here
Waiting
For you to find me
#2
First off there are a couple of spelling errors so I would suggest giving it the once over with a spell checker.

I like the context. It seems to flow quite smoothly, though some of the lines have a little more than the rhythm allows. Also, some of the verses contain lines which seem confusing structurally. The context may be sound, but the extra line in the third and sixth verse throw me off a little.

Good luck with it.
#3
i think its pretty good, mabey change a few things, but overall pretty nice.
Equiptment:

Bass: Yamaha RBX170
Amp: Fender Rumble 100
Pedal: Boss BOD-3 Bass overdrive pedal