#1
My newest song, wrote acoustically.
Very laid back, Iron & Wine-esque.
Crit4Crit


I had the sea
And you had the sails
I had the cross
But you had the nails

And so I walked
Into the rest of my life, I thought
Into the rest of my life, I thought

You had the world
Under your shoes
You made the call
But I knew the truth

And so I walked
Into the rest of my life, I thought
Into the rest of my life, I thought

You missed the point
I missed the signs
Cause you held your greed
Over my eyes

And so you walked
Out of my life so you won't get caught
And now I've got
The chance to say that
You're not the girl I thought.


Thanks for reading
This song is extremely heartfelt
So I would love some crits

//misterchainsaw//
#3
Quote by MisterChainsaw
My newest song, wrote acoustically.
Very laid back, Iron & Wine-esque.
Crit4Crit


I had the sea
And you had the sails
I had the cross
But you had the nails
It's alright not to special

And so I walked
Into the rest of my life, I thought
Into the rest of my life, I thought
I thought the Chorus was a bit repititive

You had the world
Under your shoes
You made the call
But I knew the truth
Good captures the Image of the song

And so I walked
Into the rest of my life, I thought
Into the rest of my life, I thought

You missed the point
I missed the signs
Cause you held your greed
Over my eyes
Good Shows the point

And so you walked
Out of my life so you won't get caught
And now I've got
The chance to say that
You're not the girl I thought.
I think the ending is strong


Thanks for reading
This song is extremely heartfelt
So I would love some crits

//misterchainsaw//



Pretty good but I think you might be able to play it electric (guitar similar to glycerine) I give it 7/10.
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