#1
Blood stained
Images of the past drift by
Through the confines of a distorted mind
Heads bowed; in unison
Maidens of white satire pray
The screeching of the nearing foreclosure of life
Rings endlessly
Not a torment, but a pleasure
The echos of the tortured

Screaming in vain
The hand of humanity crushed under the lid
Of a coffin sealed
Memories portrayed
Of a castle built to crumble
The silouette fades
How pathetic we are, in dying days

An accumlated filth
Spread far and wide
Cattle for the grinders
The innocent they tremble
The guilty stand confused
We've come so far
Yet the end is just a glimpse of past travesties
How can we fear the ultimate end
When we've woven blankets of destruction
How can we prolong the inevitable
When we're on the brink of our own destruction?

Screaming in vain
The hand of humanity crushed under the lid
Of a coffin sealed
Memories portrayed
Of a castle built to crumble
The silhouette fades
How pathetic we are, in dying days

The memories we hold dear
Breed the chaos that is near
My gear
Ibanez RG7321
Jackson Warrior WRXT *FS/FT*
Jasmine J35
Squier Fender P-Bass
Ibanez TBX150H
Crate 4x12
Fender Rumble 60


Part of UG's 7 STRING LEGION
#2
Hmmmm...this is actually good...do you have any sound related to it yet?
#4
After reading this I feel I need to go take a course in writing 101. Your writing style is awesome, the message is truthful. I don’t have near the color or visuals in my writing that you have. You blew me away. Great job!

If you want to crit one of mine take your pick.

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#5
thanks man, seriously. you have no idea how much that meant to me, that was probably the greatest feedback i've ever received on anything i've ever wrote, and i'm truly thankful. i haven't time to crit any of yours, but i will asap. thank you again for your kind words man!
My gear
Ibanez RG7321
Jackson Warrior WRXT *FS/FT*
Jasmine J35
Squier Fender P-Bass
Ibanez TBX150H
Crate 4x12
Fender Rumble 60


Part of UG's 7 STRING LEGION