#1
Ok, my first song. So don't hit me too hard with your comments, pls

It's a bit of a moody song though. Slow in the start, and gets faster by the chorus ;]

[Verse 1]
How would you like to go on your own,
Feeling alone, feeling so cold,
Time to start breaking the mould,
Try to fold, Or even
Don't wait to be told.
Survive the pressure as your hopes get lesser,
And watch you don't get slammed down..

[Chorus, it repeats once.]
The dream will never begin,
Never begin until you have drowned your old sins.
Probably pushed to the rim?
Never regret, and never give in to him!

[Verse 2]
A use of the powerful hand, it's a demand,
Try to land straight in the sand.
Hurting yourself now won't help,
You'll just damage yourself.
Everything will become clear, try not to fear.
The end of the hurt is now near.

[Chorus, still repeats once.]
The dream will never begin,
Never begin until you have drowned your old sins.
Probably pushed to the rim?
Never regret, and never give into him!

[Small Last Verse]
After the broken sins,
There's just one thing left to do..
Attack the source, exert your force,
And bring them down to their knees..!

[Chorus, still repeats once.]
The dream will never begin,
Never begin until you have drowned your old sins.
Probably pushed to the rim?
Never regret, and never give into him!


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#3
I love it nd ill try nd make up a solo 4 inbetween the second verse nd the chorus
or it cud jst fit in anywer