#1
Verse 1:

We could hide, reside,
But in the end,
They'd catch us out.
Without a doubt...
Now there's no-where left to hide.

Chorus:

And as they close in,
Say goodbye.
The final conflict has arrived.

Verse 2:

No matter where you lie,
You know you're gonna die,
Now as the skies turn red.

Keep your children safe,
Tell them it will be OK,
As the lights grow dim.

Chorus:

And as they close in,
Say goodbye.
The final conflict has arrived.

Outro: - Repeat to the end.

And as they close in,
Drowning in sin,
We will fight...
To stay alive...

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#2
You seem to have a really good grasp of rhythm and flow. This piece jsut flows off the tongue. The verse especially had a good feel to it, and was a nice way to set up the piece. However I would consider changing the last line of the chorus. "Final conflict" just seems a bit unneccessary. Even something as simple as "the end" would suffice. Second verse, I like the premise, but I think you could really expand on it. I need more detail there. It's just too matter-of-fact-ish and it doesn't convey the worry and horror that it should. Anyways, I hope this crit helped and I hope to read more from you.

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