Very good. Different, eccentric. Like Solemn Silence said, it doesn't sound finished. Just bass and drums. I'd love to hear a finished product with more instruments in the mix.
"On this life that we call home
The years go fast
and the days go so slow...

the days go so slow
I think it would be cool if later in the song you put some distortion into the guitar and thickened the bass.
i agree. this would sound good with real instruments and loads of distortion. but it's a good base to build a song on. c4c right?