Dude, I think it's a good cover, especially the intro, I thought it was played really well.
The only problem was that everything wasn't that clear, but without a studio I think it's impossible for anything to sound really good anyways :]

Also, it shouldn't matter to much, but maybe less distortion, that's what I learned. In that cover for bombtrack I had, that one is a re-do, because the first one had way to much distortion and was really, really crappy. It makes a big difference hearing stuff cleaner. But overall I really like it, keep it up bro 8]
Sounds good it hard to really make everything out with the quailty but we're all on a budget here right. Well keep it up man and by the time you guys are in high school you'll be awesome....