#1
From my perch, perceptions left me perplexed.
Dancing around things once said.
All these bottled memories I’m sending across oceans,
Or at least a big pond.
(This holy ghost had left life alone)
I promised the world and a dozen roses...

a poem?

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#2
this is really good. you dont waste words which is excellent. beautiful opening and beautiful finish. Two things though...I think you can find a different way of saying "bottled memories". The rest of your poem is quite lyrical and I just think bottled memories is a little too cliche. You could definitely improve that part. And also I don't understand the part in parenthesis. It seems out of place. In my opinion the poem would be more complete and flow easier without it, but I imagine there was a reason you put it there so its your call

heres mine https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1008795