#1
Please, don't be to harsh on me, I just started to compose recently. The song is kinda "bipolar" in others words so don't be surprised about the genres or expressive emotion you see in this song.


Don't use RSE
it sounds like a mess.
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Last edited by The ZenOfShred at Nov 30, 2008,
#2
This is cool. Really unique, haven't heard much similar like it.

I like the verse riff, like the genre you made up, it is kind of melodic/chromatic. It works.

The chorus is a bit ****ing insane man. Playability wise I guess it's possible, but I think there could be more variety or something. Random stops are pretty cool, maybe vocals would fix it sounding stupid in GP lol. THE DRUMS ARE WTF? Gravity blasts I guess..?

Verse 2 is my favourite riff, good job on it.

I don't like the transition into the bridge, could be done a lot better.

The bridge isn't bad or anything. It's quite good on the contrary. But it doesn't fit.. at all. You have a crazy mess of guitar work, and then this pansy bridge?

The solo is good, but again it doesn't fit well.

The outro is just bad for this song IMO, like the bridge. Solo is meh.

Overall, 5.283/10 with all the random acoustic parts and bad transitions. If you removed the bridges or made them better fit it would easily higher this mark.
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#3
Quote by AngrySockMonkey
This is cool. Really unique, haven't heard much similar like it.

I like the verse riff, like the genre you made up, it is kind of melodic/chromatic. It works.

The chorus is a bit ****ing insane man. Playability wise I guess it's possible, but I think there could be more variety or something. Random stops are pretty cool, maybe vocals would fix it sounding stupid in GP lol. THE DRUMS ARE WTF? Gravity blasts I guess..?

Verse 2 is my favourite riff, good job on it.

I don't like the transition into the bridge, could be done a lot better.

The bridge isn't bad or anything. It's quite good on the contrary. But it doesn't fit.. at all. You have a crazy mess of guitar work, and then this pansy bridge?

The solo is good, but again it doesn't fit well.

The outro is just bad for this song IMO, like the bridge. Solo is meh.

Overall, 5.283/10 with all the random acoustic parts and bad transitions. If you removed the bridges or made them better fit it would easily higher this mark.


Thanks for being honest. I might make two different versions and I always had a bad sense of transitioning in some songs I make.


Thanks for the crit.

The reason why I added the softer stuff parts in was to just surprise the listener and change there feeling about the song and do something totally different. In other words I call it more of a bipolar type of piece.
Last edited by The ZenOfShred at Nov 30, 2008,
#4
I'm sorry but I only found the structure of the song interesting. The Filling of the structure isn't really interesting. Riffs aren't well elaborated, solos are really dull and too fast for a slow acoustic part. The acoustic part is also really dull, not so much elaboration to make it interesting.
4/10
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#5
hmm
necrophagist style intro is good.
Chorus seems pretty unplayable for any of the instruments. And if you can actually play that good for you but good luck finding a drummer and a bassist that can play along.
Transition from chorus to verse needs work but it's ok in this context.
Aside from the ridiculous chorus, not too bad of a song.
Structure is interesting and works very well in this context.
#6
Quote by Kevin67
hmm
necrophagist style intro is good.
Chorus seems pretty unplayable for any of the instruments. And if you can actually play that good for you but good luck finding a drummer and a bassist that can play along.
Transition from chorus to verse needs work but it's ok in this context.
Aside from the ridiculous chorus, not too bad of a song.
Structure is interesting and works very well in this context.


Did you even try to play the chorus on guitar?


It is fair simple with you have good trilling and picking technique. Rhanks for the crit.
#7
That drumming seems impossible (in the chorus or whatever).
Reminds of some good ol' cybergrind. You could use programmed drums.
Or if you had Marco Minnieman (sp?), he could probably do that.

The textures of the song remind of Gorguts, Genghis Tron, and Sikth.
The main riffs are powerful stuff.
They hit hard and fast and I like them.

Your transitioning isn't that bad. It does work in the context of this song.
I like how there's no warning for the outro switch. I thought that was tight.

The solos were well done and tasteful. I didn't find them to be ridiculous.
But the acoustic parts do need moar articulation.
Idk, I do like the minimalism of said parts, so I don't think you should change them.

9/10.


C4C?
You have varied taste, but I would recommend Lycotrope.
Check out the other songs by all means, but that's my strongest and heavist song.
#8
Quote by Kevin67
hmm
necrophagist style intro is good.
Chorus seems pretty unplayable for any of the instruments. And if you can actually play that good for you but good luck finding a drummer and a bassist that can play along.
Transition from chorus to verse needs work but it's ok in this context.
Aside from the ridiculous chorus, not too bad of a song.
Structure is interesting and works very well in this context.


Quote by huevos
That drumming seems impossible (in the chorus or whatever).
Reminds of some good ol' cybergrind. You could use programmed drums.
Or if you had Marco Minnieman (sp?), he could probably do that.

The textures of the song remind of Gorguts, Genghis Tron, and Sikth.
The main riffs are powerful stuff.
They hit hard and fast and I like them.

Your transitioning isn't that bad. It does work in the context of this song.
I like how there's no warning for the outro switch. I thought that was tight.

The solos were well done and tasteful. I didn't find them to be ridiculous.
But the acoustic parts do need moar articulation.
Idk, I do like the minimalism of said parts, so I don't think you should change them.

9/10.


C4C?
You have varied taste, but I would recommend Lycotrope.
Check out the other songs by all means, but that's my strongest and heavist song.


Thanks for the crits. I'm critting your now.

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Last edited by The ZenOfShred at Dec 1, 2008,
#9
That's Swedish.
I don't touch that ****.
Jk.

I think I was talking about the double-bass.
Or maybe the tom fills.
No, nevermind, it was the overall speed.
You would need a really technical and precise drummer for this if you wanted to do it live.
Maybe you could hire this dude.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E_3PtohTkVs&feature=related