#1
new to this and thought id see what you guys think of a song im starting:

No one sees what lies within our shadows
our flaws they lie within the dark
a fragmentation variation of oneself
an illusion only seen through the light

and they're just shadows
shadows of reality
#2
Good, but hard to judge a song by one verse.

Least favourite but is L3. It felt too long, and the assonant "ation" sounds made it a mouthful to read.