#1
Verse 1:

You, you were the cure, I wanted more,
Cause you've got it all to give,
But you're draining like a sieve,
Do you think you're gonna live?

And though the anaesthetic's low,
You know the pain is gonna slow,
But now I'm coming down to Earth,
I see you for what you're worth.

Chorus:

In cancer I can trust,
Dead stem cells,
To bring you away from me,
In your eyes,
I fade into the black,
Dark disguise,
Ain't no coming back,
Cause I've heard your lies!

Verse 2:

And as you're walking down the floor,
Through the operation door,
You feel the surgeon cut your brain,
I ask you does it hurt the same,
As all the time you spent alone,
Now as you're lying on your throne,
Your blood runs colder than ice,
My immortal sacrifice.

Chorus:

In cancer I can trust,
Dead stem cells,
To bring you away from me,
In your eyes,
I fade into the black,
Dark disguise,
Ain't no coming back,
Cause I've heard your lies!

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#2
The forced rhymes made me throw up a little.

Okay, that was the bad curry from last night, bu this was still pretty bad.
#3
Lol that's what you get when you let a friend help you, I'll be changing some of the rhymes, especially sieve ... :P
#4
Quote by Static The Band
Verse 1:

You, you were the cure, I wanted more,
Cause you've got it all to give,
But you're draining like a sieve,
Do you think you're gonna live?


Ohhhh lawd.. the forced rhyming here is horrible

And though the anaesthetic's low,
You know the pain is gonna slow,
But now I'm coming down to Earth,
I see you for what you're worth.


Not too bad here, but still don't rhyme for the sake of it


Chorus:

In cancer I can trust,
Dead stem cells,
To bring you away from me,

This isn't bad at all

In your eyes,
I fade into the black,
Dark disguise,
Ain't no coming back,
Cause I've heard your lies!

And you've lost it, it became too generic



I would of continued, but the forced rhyming is just horrible...
All I want is for everyone to go to hell...
...It's the last place I was seen before I lost myself



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#6
It's pretty cool man as has been said a bit of the rhyming does seem kinda forced but overall not bad.