Poll: unless its kicks, man
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deepskyblue
4 40%
navy
6 60%
Voters: 10.
#1
3 points, 3 days, you know how we do.

childhood friend

we found a playground and swung
until our feet touched the skies,
rocked back and forth on frogs,
and raced across the monkey bars.
we sat in the metal jungle gym
flicking bottle caps at the trees
bodies shaking from the cold
so we found smoke to warm us up.
we ran through the sandbox
and I ruined my flip flops,
still haven't washed them, though
I wore 'em every day this weekend.
some kids paintballed our cars
and we started to run them down --
gave up before I opened my door
so I laid on my hood and
glanced up at the stars and grinned.
"hey maybe in another ten years,
we could do this again?"


honey pie

i was driving in my car, listening
to some happy upbeat pop tunes,
you know, the kind written about
you and me and everything we've
always wanted to be.
I pressed the pedal a bit more
as the chorus came in and
sweetly sang along with enough
air in my lungs to throw a concert
inside my car, but still not enough to
invite you to it.
"oh, honey pie you are making me crazy
i'm in love, but i'm lazy
so won't you please come home"

i passed a mall, some record stores and
fast food places. looked through the faces
to see if i saw you there, anywhere.

i was on my way home. just a few
streets left, when i saw an old lady
faint on the concrete floor. I pulled
my car over. I thought she was dead.
oh god oh god. decided to check for pulse.
grabbed her hand and put two fingers
on her thin wrist. thump thump. thump
I thought i heard something. thank God.
then, the heartbeats started getting louder
and changing rhythmically. a melody
kicked in. riiing!. i took my phone out of my
left pocket
"oh, hey honey what's up...great...
what are you doing tonight?...yeah...
awesome...i'll pick you up at 7...
can't wait...it'll be perfect...you, me..."

Last edited by SilenceEvolves at Dec 1, 2008,
#2
awesome
also, the parts in quotations marks in my piece were supposed to be in italics. i could of sworn i put them that way in the pm.
#3
Quote by cubs
awesome
also, the parts in quotations marks in my piece were supposed to be in italics. i could of sworn i put them that way in the pm.


you did, I fixed it now.
#6
I relate so much to the first one right now there's no way I can't go with it. Second was good but voice felt a little weaker at places.