#1
so. yeah. crit for crit sil vous plait? ta guys
live happy.

I am obediant, ready and waiting.
With a circular base and weighted
thoughts, knock me down- see what
happens.

Now i know how the firefighters
feel- these muscles are baked now,
ready to jump up and save your day
at a whisper, or a hint.

I was Superman, and now I fly
through hoops.
Define "worth it". Make me beg
and bleed to be here, and to be a
fraction of your time,
because these scales are so outwieghed-
I think i used them too much.

"Oh honey, this is no life for a
romantic,".

This is everything i deserve.
I know you think that I'm someone you can trust.
But I'm scared i'll get scared and i swear i'll try to nail you back up.



Female SouperHero
#4
I thought this was pretty pretty good. However, I think you still need work with the line breaks (what/happens, firefighter/feel, fly/through come to mind especially).

Everything else seemed in place to me.