#1
So there's a t-shirt contest for a CAS group named ISAL and the prize is CAS hours which I really need to pass the semester. I designed a t-shirt and would like as much criticism as I can get to make it better.


http://zefrenchy.deviantart.com/art/ISAL-T-shirt-Design-105259006

thanks !

to see it fullsize, click on the image in the link...
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Après avoir crevé par accès de furie
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Last edited by illuminatiano at Dec 2, 2008,
#5
Artwork covers too much of the shirt.

Text is too low. People aren't really gonna want to look down there.

Maybe switch the Text and the Explosions around?
[img]http://i.imgur.com/LYZyCdp.gif[/img]


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#6
Alright well the point of criticism is to tell me how to improve it.

So how can I make it better ?

EDIT : That is the back of the T-shirt, the front has some logo thing.
Cette nuit j'ai rêvé que je mâchais ses yeux
Après avoir crevé par accès de furie
Ta replète panse d'helminthes blancs nourrie,
Trop prompte à déféquer le fruit d'un vit sanieux.
#8
I say.

Move ISAL.

Put Text on top.

Put 15 in the Skull.

Explosions on the bottom.
[img]http://i.imgur.com/LYZyCdp.gif[/img]


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#9
Quote by Gargantuan
I can't read the text very well


I'm sorry ? I can read it perfectly fine, just look at it full size.
Cette nuit j'ai rêvé que je mâchais ses yeux
Après avoir crevé par accès de furie
Ta replète panse d'helminthes blancs nourrie,
Trop prompte à déféquer le fruit d'un vit sanieux.
#10
Quote by Momentosis
I say.

Move ISAL.

Put Text on top.

Put 15 in the Skull.

Explosions on the bottom.


http://zefrenchy.deviantart.com/art/ISAL-T-shirt-Design-v2-105264635

hmmm. Is it better ? You decide.
Cette nuit j'ai rêvé que je mâchais ses yeux
Après avoir crevé par accès de furie
Ta replète panse d'helminthes blancs nourrie,
Trop prompte à déféquer le fruit d'un vit sanieux.
#11
No...

There's just something wrong with it...

Can't exactly put my finger on it.


I don't like the explosions though.
[img]http://i.imgur.com/LYZyCdp.gif[/img]


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#12
Quote by Momentosis
No...

There's just something wrong with it...

Can't exactly put my finger on it.


I don't like the explosions though.


the explosions are self made in C4D

took me forever to make them.
Cette nuit j'ai rêvé que je mâchais ses yeux
Après avoir crevé par accès de furie
Ta replète panse d'helminthes blancs nourrie,
Trop prompte à déféquer le fruit d'un vit sanieux.
#13
Second one is definitely better. Landmines explode on the ground, so having the explosions on the bottom looks more suitable.

Put a big ISAL logo on the back shoulder area too.
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#16
breadstick : I'm not allowed to put things on the shoulders.

JMTrio - I understand, although what I wanted to achieve in this piece is basicly chaos and terror on a t-shirt to make people interested in scared at the same time.
Cette nuit j'ai rêvé que je mâchais ses yeux
Après avoir crevé par accès de furie
Ta replète panse d'helminthes blancs nourrie,
Trop prompte à déféquer le fruit d'un vit sanieux.
#18
Yeah, but 60% aren't. Look on the bright side.
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