#1
So your boyfriend dumped your sorry ass
Broke your heart, left you for dead
For a skimpy, controlling psycho bitch
Who made him shave his head

But there's no need to mope around
And listen to MCR
Just grab a gat and blow him away
Then hit his girlfriend with your car

Because violence solves everything
All of our problems can be fixed by punching things
Quentin Tarantino can't be wrong
Civility is boring
So let's violence on some hippies right now

Katookas out there smoking dope
Giving your whole school a bad name
Have a training montage with an Asian guy
Then go teach them a lesson in pain

So many kids sucking face in the halls
That you can't get to your next class
No need to ask politely
Just go over and kick some faces

Because violence solves everything
All of our problems can be fixed by punching things
Jake and Tony Jaa can't be wrong
Civility is boring
So let's blow up a Wal-mart right now


Thoughts?
#2
I found it disgusting. Is that what you wanted?

"Kootakas..." Needs an apostrophe.

"So many kids sucking face in the halls
That you can't get to your next class
No need to ask politely
Just go over and kick some faces"

Repetition of face didn't work.
#5
How do we go through with 'So let's violence on some hippies right now'? I've never heard of violencing on someone before...

Honestly...this is not very well written. It seems it took you the amount of time it took you to post this to write it out...
#6
Quote by ginjaninja
I found it disgusting. Is that what you wanted?
Not exactly. :P I was going more for satirical, sort of lampooning the mindset of 'violence will solve all of our problems' that you find in much of modern entertainment.

Quote by ginjaninja
"Kootakas..." Needs an apostrophe.
No it doesn't, in the same way that 'Rastafarians' or 'Pirates' or 'Girl Scouts' wouldn't have apostrophes.

Quote by ginjaninja
Repetition of face didn't work.
You're right, didn't even notice that.

Quote by the agony scene
immature,bad
Not exactly constructive, guy.

Quote by Soroki
How do we go through with 'So let's violence on some hippies right now'? I've never heard of violencing on someone before...
It's not really supposed to be good grammar; it's in the same vein as phrases like "I'm going to violence all over you, kid" or "I'ma sex you up" or "I think that guy in the Corvette is going to Death Proof us".


All valid points, for the most part. Will be sure to put up something else for critique as soon as I write it.