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Okay, original thread here: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1013031

After leaving it for a day or two, I decided to rewrite almost the entire thing, only keeping the beginning and the end. I feel like it comes across clearer now.
This is the version I will be turning in tomorrow in writing class.
All comments/criticisms appreciated!
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Walking

Walking through the desert,
For miles and miles,
Just me,

Alone.

Alone with my thoughts,
With nothing to do
But walk, and

Think.

Think about who I am,
Why I am here,
Where I am going.

Forward.

Always forward.
Even though it’s hard,
And even though this sand seems

Endless,

I know that it can’t be endless.
There must be something more,
And even though I’m

Tired,

So, so tired,
I can’t give up.
I must keep

Hoping.

Hoping that,
Beyond all of this sand,
There is something better,

Something worth all of the

Walking