#1
Tonight, here we are
Just you and me
Is this world really
All you thought it could be?

Tonight, here I stand
With you in my arms
The one that I love
Could I ever want more?

With so many people living
A loveless, hopeless life
For me, thanks to you
I can still carry on

Your blue eyes glance, I'm lost
In your unspoken words
But are you all I thought you could be
Could you really love... me...?

Though hope is fading
I still keep on waiting
I'm lost without you
And I don't know how to tell you
It's you that I need
And I can't live without this

Tonight, here we are
Just you and me
Are you really all
I think you could be?
#2
Quote by kylepianoman
Tonight, here we are
Just you and me
Is this world really
i don't know how, but you should change this line.
All you thought it could be?

Tonight, here I stand
With you in my arms
The one that I love
Could I ever want more?
this is pretty cliche. i don't like this verse/stanza.

With so many people living
A loveless, hopeless life
For me, thanks to you
I can still carry on

Your blue eyes glance, I'm lost
In your unspoken words
But are you all I thought you could be
Could you really love... me...?
i do like this verse except the last line.

Though hope is fading
I still keep on waiting
though all hope is fading,
i will stand here waiting

I'm lost without you
And I don't know how to tell you
get rid of i in this line above
It's you that I need
And I can't live without this

Tonight, here we are
Just you and me
Are you really all
I think you could be?


it's okay, but it's kind of like every love song i've ever read. i mean it's cute, yeah, but it's lacking something deeper.
i'd appreciate it if you could crit my song taracing my bones, linked in my sig.
#3
it was something I just kinda scribed down in a couple mins during chemistry... I haven't done too much editing.

obviously, it's gonna mean more to me than anyone else