#1
Tell me what you think


I just don’t understand
Why you had to lie to me

I just don’t understand
What’s ****ing wrong with me

Why won’t you tell me?
Or would that just be too hard?

I should of listened but that’s not what I
Doooo oooooh
Doooo oooooh
That’s not what I do!!

What the **** is wrong with you
You stupid piece of ****

I don’t want to be associated with you
You make me ****in sick

I hope you burn in hell
Or die in the pit

I should of listened but that’s not what I
Doooo oooooh
Doooo oooooh
That’s not what I do!!
#4
you really express anger in this song...is there going to be more added? If so..make sure you don't get bipolar and start getting sad or happy in the song just mad.. good job tho
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#5
Quote by #1 synth
****ing. awesome.

"I hope you burn in hell
Or die in the pit"

my favorite part.



Oh the irony (Freepost thread reference)!


Angst on paper.
Dull.
#6
its supposed to angsty

its punk you ****in idiot

haha just kidding thanks for the compliments guy appreciated it

by the way thats the hole song its done i dont like finsishing songs half through just for that reason

fast, angsty, and short just the way I like it
#7
Sing this out loud, and tell me it doesn't sound ridiculous. This will sound harsh, but everything about this screams juvenile, and is dull as dishwater. Simple rhyme scheme dictates the words you use, and the vulgarities are just immature. "What the **** is wrong with you You stupid piece of ****". Really?


Also, that's not what I do is just weak as a chorus. It sounds like badly translated english, and I can never picture someone singing this. I think a good technique to employ is always say what you've written down aloud. If you're alone and think it sounds silly, chances are others will too.
#8
Sorry. It's been said. It's been read. And it's overdone.

There's nothing interesting about this piece at all. Cliche.

lol Dylan.

Have a nice day.
#9
haha ok thanks guys yeah if you didnt notice my vocabulary is about the same as a 9 year olds need to work on that