#1
how weak a hold we have
on the paths we try walking
we have only eyes to see
and there is something more
beneath everything

the distance so far
between where we want to go
and where we really are
it's so far apart

are we who we want to be?
will we ever be?

such limited control we hold
over the way things go
how much do we know?
will we ever know?
will i ever see
beyond the putrid lining
that betrays reality
placed so carefully
between the harsh truth
and me

i'm not who i want to be
i ask with all my heart
rebuild me

C4C!!!!
We're only strays.
#3
such limited control we hold
over the way things go

That's probably the best line of this piece.

The only thing I would change is the last section. I understand the idea, but I think you can word it better. I do like how you put the genre this piece has, so it's easier to get the flow.