Some good riffs in there...Industrial isnt really MY thing, so im not real familiar with what "good or bad" would be, haha. But from a riff standpoint as i said i liked em. Few of of the pauses kinda threw me off, haha, felt like a real long transition or somethin, but maybe that was the idea. Sounds like a pretty good hand work out with all the trem picking, haha. Cool intro, and the recording quality wasnt too shabby either. Would like to offer more but as i said im not too familiar with industrial.


riff1 if u got a min, just whipped it up earlier kinda thinkin bout usin it some kinda song, haha, just dont quite know what yet...rough btw

if that doesnt work

Last edited by shinedown98 at Dec 8, 2008,
At first I didn't really like the intro riff, but with the lead it works pretty well. Like the guy above me, I don't know much about industrial so I'll crit more from a riff standpoint. I think some of your longer pauses, transitions, are a bit awkward without drums or bass behind it because right now it just seems to be more of an awkward pause. You had a few riffs in there that could work with something, but the flow seemed a bit random. Maybe write a few more riffs that connect will and stick them in and this'll improve.
Yeah ^ wasn't much of a fan of intro riff either, the song wasnt bad tho, needs to flow through a little smoother tho. With work, can be a good thing.
Alright thanks for the crits guys, i wrote the riffs, melodies etc.. withen half and hour and spent about two recording. I made this mostly to practice recording.