#1
This is the first time I write lyrics so I think I really need tips on improving this.
Also I know it's kind of short..

Wasted Away

Why is this so difficult?
Maybe it's what the outcome occults
Having so many opportunities
Never taking them seriously

These chances
They're wasting away
I don't think I can stand another day

It's always the first thing on my mind
It always seems to be left behind

These chances
They're wasting away
I don't think I can stand another day

These chances
They've wasted away
Should've taken them seriously...

They've wasted away..
#2
Having so many opportunities
Never taking them seriously

That flows really well, easy to relate to.

These chances
They're wasting away
I don't think I can stand another day

The last line, you could probably change. It's somewhat predictable.

It's always the first thing on my mind
It always seems to be left behind

I love the contradiction you got going with "first thing" yet it's "left behind"


These chances
They've wasted away
Should've taken them seriously...

They've wasted away..

It's a good closure, but adding stuff would be nice.

Overall, for your first piece, I'd say it's pretty good!

Crit. mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1017761
#3
I would like to draw your attention, if I may, to The rules, section two, subsection c:

THREAD TITLES
Only the title of the piece and the genre/style (e.g. Screamo/Poetry) are allowed in your titles. If you can’t think of one “Untitled” will suffice. With the exceptions of W.I.P. (Work In Progress) and O.T.S. (On The Spot) which are permitted.

Any of the following are not permitted:

* Symbols or attention seeking devices
* Solid capitalisation
* begging for a critique (I.e. C4C or Please crit mine!!)
* HTML, because it doesn’t work
* Swearing