I just made a new version of a song idea I've been working on. I really like the ending, so bear the repetitiveness and enjoy the ending. Tell me what you think.

Click the link in the sig (Event Horizon) and it's the first song.
Definitely would be a cool start to a song, just cut it shorter. The bends kind of got repetative. Maybe end the song with the same intro, except slow it down?
I loved the ambient stuff after, it was empty, but it has potential. maybe throw a lyric line or some acoustic guitar over that, or both.

If you can, can you crit my song?
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