#1
my mind keeps going after
i stopped, a giant bust of
her face sits ontop of it, starring
like a grecian goddess at
whatever i did wrong, i
clopsed my eyes, with
every I...,

i spell star
em
eh
tee
tee

i spell her
eh
el
el
eye
es
oh
en

coif. i'm at a bakery,
the bread smells great
the woman behind the counter
winked at me, and my face is
warm from ten minutes prior
when i went down on another
woman, i
look at myself
catching my reflection in
all the bakeries mirrors, glasses
and shiny topped biscuits, i've seen
myself in everything's eyes
except hers.
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Last edited by Something_Vague at Dec 11, 2008,
#3
^ Letters, dick.

S_V, loved this bro.. wish I had something constructive for you.
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

#6
Wonderful stuff. Took me bloody yonks' to get into it properly, but once I did... oh yeah!
I loved the way this was brought down to earth just on that last line. You didn't advance on it, you just let it be. And that makes it all the more better and artisticly perfect.

There really is feck all I can say that will in any way help you, sorry.

*bookmarked* as one of the only pieces that is of a confusing nature that I actually understood confidently.