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I was writing this afternoon and came up with this. It is really short, and really poppy. I also came up with a nice poppy melody that I'm probably using for this song. It's inspired on a salvia trip to be honest, but I'm masking it as it was love or enjoying being around someone. As you can see it is very incomplete, and I am absolutely clueless on what to put in those empty spots. Suggestions, and feedback is appreciated!

Take me where the sun shines bright
Where worries shrink and
(need a line here )

Take me where the sky is blue
Where love is shed all over you (kinda lame, suggestion please!)

Silhouettes of green, a shattering scene
Sharply dancing across your head
A senseless feel, a scattering dream
Just takes you deeper into this mess


Thanks!
Quote by bluesrocker101
Hmm, you might just be my favorite Oct. 06er.


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agreed