#1
i see the world in a light so dim
what do you live for when you cant even live
for something everything i would give
i look out the window into a future so grim
loveless in a love filled world
stuck dying to break free
if i found love it still wouldnt be enough for me
loveless in a love filled world
no one to shelter my pain
no one to see my shame
who is there but me to blame
how do i escape from the freezing rain
cut to my heart see the guilt
ill never esape being alone
repair my own wounds with stitches iv sewn
because this bitter past of tears iv built
one day i hope to see the light
put the past and the present behind
but for now i stay blind
never caring whats wrong or whats right
#2
unremittingly dark. i like the language overall, but your rhyme scheme seems inconsistent