#1
I'm pretty new to writing lyrics, but here's some I wrote for an acoustic song of mine, entitled "Gone Away".

I’m looking
At the sun
The stars and moon
Are gone away
You know I’m wondering
I’m seeing you
Will you please…
Please stay, yeah

I’m crying
No one’s listening
The people
Are gone away, yeah
You know I’m wondering
I’m seeing you
You’re loving me
I fall away, yeah

You feel me walking to you
Born of the mirthful man
My face is a mask of laughter
Living alone in a dying land

We’re running
From the world
My troubles
Are gone away, yeah
You know I’m living
The dreams of the many
You’re loving me
I fall away, yeah

I’ve given
You my heart
I lifted you up
Put you down in sacred land
Do you see why this sin has
Closed that hand
Calling down to the
Legions below

I’m trying my whole life
To put aside early misery
Falling down in the afterlife
What I salvage from the debris

I’m told I was given
The life of a martyred soul
It’s this that makes me condemned
To wander the lonely world

I know
You and I
We’ll sing together
In the halls of time
We’ll laugh, I’ll look at you
I’ll open my mouth
Please stay
These hounds they bray

I’ll say
Don’t leave me
Love me forever
I won’t die lonely
You look back at me
Honey you don’t seem to see
This wasn’t supposed to be real
This lie that you gave me
It’s falling away
#2
I dont like the "yeah" parts, cause it makes people seem full of themselfs. But other than that its good
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#3
I dont like the "yeah" parts, cause it makes people seem full of themselfs. But other than that its good


Agreed
#4
Alright, I guess I hadn't even thought of that until now. I'll change that. Thanks!