#1
Conjunctions and Chemical Reactions - Acoustic/Indie

Only a look so fierce
can pierce a night so dark
and a sweater can't warm you
with a heart so cold
so don't call me when you need someone to hold, to hold

So a brief conjunction of love and lies
brings an eruption of anger and spite
and this chemical reaction brings one thing...

The look in your eyes is why i sing
thoguh the sound of your voice is why i scream
and the feel of your touch gives me chills
and i'm still more addictive than all your pills

So a brief conjunction of love and lies
brings an eruption of anger and spite
and this chemical reaction brings one thing...

The sound of your eyes
and the look of your voice
tell me everything
#2
Quote by Phoenix-Kun
Conjunctions and Chemical Reactions - Acoustic/Indie

Only a look so fierce
can pierce a night so dark
and a sweater can't warm you
with a heart so cold
so don't call me when you need someone to hold, to hold

So a brief conjunction of love and lies
brings an eruption of anger and spite
and this chemical reaction brings one thing...

The look in your eyes is why i sing
though the sound of your voice is why i scream
and the feel of your touch gives me chills
and i'm still more addictive than all your pills
I Really like this verse. It flows well and conveys the senses and you can imagine the emotion it creates.

So a brief conjunction of love and lies
brings an eruption of anger and spite
and this chemical reaction brings one thing...

The sound of your eyes
and the look of your voice
tell me everything
Very good use of word variation here which I like a lot


One thing I might change is the word anger to hatred, to me it would add more power to the line, and eruption of anger seems a little obvious to me although everyone is different. Overall this is really good song and I would give it 5/5. It has a good flow and has good use of words. Good job.
#3
Quote by Phoenix-Kun
Conjunctions and Chemical Reactions - Acoustic/Indie

Only a look so fierce
can pierce a night so dark
and a sweater can't warm you
with a heart so cold
so don't call me when you need someone to hold, to hold
This line felt really out of place, the length and all. It's a bit cliche and the rhyme seems horribly forced.

So a brief conjunction of love and lies
brings an eruption of anger and spite
and this chemical reaction brings one thing...

The look in your eyes is why i sing
though the sound of your voice is why i scream
and the feel of your touch gives me chills
and i'm still more addictive than all your pills

So a brief conjunction of love and lies
brings an eruption of anger and spite
and this chemical reaction brings one thing...

The sound of your eyes
and the look of your voice
tell me everything



This was really good, just a few things I've pinpointed.