#1
This is something my friend wrote and I have his permission to post it. Just looking to get some feedback from someone other then myself to give to him. Thx, hope you like it

I want to leave something behind
for people to remember me by
to be one of a kind
till' the day I die

when our bones have been crushed
and turned into dust
who will be there
to put you in their prayer

when it's all said and done
will you be the one
to lay me to rest
unforgotten by the best
#2
I want to leave something behind
for people to remember me by
to be one of a kind
till' the day I die
lol cute.

when our bones have been crushed
and turned into dust
who will be there
to put you in their prayer
mk

when it's all said and done
will you be the one
to lay me to rest
unforgotten by the best
mm

Mk.. honestly the writting is good. but it's rather bland and straight forward. nothing special. u get what u see. I dont really see any imagery or feeling in this. it's like reading a info paper. the only that is carrying him is the idea.
It's not stalking to watch her sleep if she fell asleep watching a movie.
a silly wind
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