#1
The volume is pretty low so you need to turn your speakers up to hear it (I don't have any decent recording stuff).
http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/__Pent__/
Also, can someone tell me what key it's in? Or ideas to expand it into a longer song?
And of course tell me any ways you think I can improve it
The chords are:

e|-0-|
b|-6-|
g|-7-|
d|-7-|
a|---|
E|---|

e|-0-|
b|-6-|
g|-7-|
d|-8-|
a|---|
E|---|

e|-5-|
b|-6-|
g|-7-|
d|-5-|
a|---|
E|---|

e|-3-|
b|-3-|
g|-4-|
d|-3-|
a|---|
E|---|

And for the heavier part:

C#
B
A
Ab
G
Gb
F


EDIT: I uploaded a new version. I fixed the tuning, added some bass to the distorted part, and made it louder.
Last edited by __Pent__ at Dec 16, 2008,
#2
you're guitar sounded out of tune
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#3
out of tune & sloppy picking/transitions

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#4
if you structured it abit better it would sound awesome, sounds abit messy as it is

nice choice of chords
#6
Seems like that distorted guitar came out of nowhere and didn't really fit at all.
Soon you will sit on the bench
of those who deny I have my soul
You sell a dream you create
Condemned by what you condemned before
Smooth are the words you sing down and high
Underground is your joy your laws