#1
I came up with this sucker after thinking about my ex. Kind of an Alt-rock thing.

Your voice echoes down the hall…
I try not to care at all…
I hear you slam the door.
Can’t hold you back anymore.
You’ve left me alone all along…

And I don’t want to think about you
Because I know I’ll go insane,
But I won’t try to stay away from you
And hide my face in shame.
I know we’ve had our problems and
Our share of fights today,
So I guess in the end…
My Heart’s The One To Blame.

My head begins to pound…
The room’s spinning ‘round and ‘round…
I find it hard to breathe…
You’ve taken over me…
My slowing hearts the only sound…

And I don’t want to think about you
Because I know I’ll go insane,
But I won’t try to stay away from you
And hide my face in shame.
I know we’ve had our problems and
Our share of fights today,
So I guess in the end…
My Heart’s The One To Blame.

If I had a single penny for every “I love you”,
I’d be the richest man alive, but it wouldn’t see me through
The tears and the nightmares that fill the empty space
Where you used to lie, beside me…

BESIDE ME!!!

And I don’t want to think about you
Because I know I’ll go insane,
But I won’t try to stay away from you
And hide my face in shame.
I know we’ve had our problems and
Our share of fights today,
So I guess in the end…
My Heart’s The One To Blame.

And I don’t want to think about you
Because I know I’ll go insane,
But I won’t try to stay away from you
And hide my face in shame.
I know we’ve had our problems and
Our share of fights today,
So I guess in the end…
My Heart’s The One To Blame.

Oh... My heart's the one to blame...
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#2
Hell, I quite enjoyed this piece
"If I had a single penny for every “I love you”,
I’d be the richest man alive, but it wouldn’t see me through
The tears and the nightmares that fill the empty space
Where you used to lie, beside me…" was the stanza that did it for me, good job and overall a good piece, if you could check out twelve walls for me... it needs some looking over
#3
I love the chorus, good job there.

On the whole, a good effort except I reckon the
"If I had a single penny for every I love you
I'd be the richest man alive"
is a little bit cliched. It doesn't distract, though, which is a good thing.

Now can you give mine a critique?
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