It's pretty cool.
I like the way you phrase your vocals, the're fast but you can understand them.
i think you have potential so keep writing.
That was great. Your voice was pretty good (for someone suffering from a cold) and you weren't off key. I think a simple bassline and drum rhythm would sound good with it.

Crit mine please?
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Damn you and your ninja-like modding