#1
well i am only 15 at the moment so be fair. jokes.
this is a song i wrote a few months ago so what you think.

LEFT ALONE

TO MANY TIMES YOU TOOK MY HEART
YOU LEFT ME THERE ALL TORN APART
YOU LEFT WITHOUT SAYING GOODBYE
ALL ALONE IGNORING MY CRIES

MY HEART,YOU'RE CRIES
MY FEAR,YOU'RE LIES
THIS TIME,TOO FAR
NO MORE, YOU ARE

HOW COULD YOU LEAVE ME ALONE
LEFT INSIDE WITH NO-ONE HOME
HOW COULD YOU LEAVE ME ALIVE
WITH ALL THE FEAR INSIDE

TO MANY TIMES YOU'VE LIED TO ME
I TRIED TO REASON BUT YOU WOULDN'T LET ME FREE
FROM ALL THE THINGS THAT I FEARED
YOU COULDN'T HELP BUT STILL ACT WEIRD

MY HEART,YOU'RE CRIES
MY FEAR,YOU'RE LIES
THIS TIME,TO FAR
NO MORE YOU ARE

HOW COULD YOU LEAVE ME ALONE
LEFT INSIDE WITH NO-ONE HOME
HOW COULD YOU HAVE LEFT ME ALIVE
WITH ALL THE FEAR INSIDE

MY HEART,YOU'RE CRIES
MY FEAR,YOU'RE LIES
THIS TIME TOO FAR
NO MORE, YOU ARE
MY LOVE,YOU'RE DEATH
SO HOLD,TO YOU'RE BREATH
IM ON, MY WAY
DON’T CARE, WHAT YOU SAY
TONIGHTS, THE NIGHT
TO FORGET, THE FRIGHT
I LEAVE WITH 1 QUESTION
WHY DID YOU LEAVE ME ALONE

HOW COULD YOU LEAVE ME ALONE
LEFT INSIDE WITH NO-ONE HOME
HOW COULD YOU HAVE LEFT ME ALIVE
WITH ALL THE FEAR INSIDE
#2
pretty good but im not into stuff like that lol
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#4
Nice. I like this kind of writing.
Oddly enough im also 15 and write this kind of stuff. O_o
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#5
Dude, firstly, unless this happens to be screamo, cut the caps. It makes it REALLY hard to read. And even if it IS screamo, cut the caps, and just tell us.

As for the song itself,

I don't mean to offend, but the whole thing is a bit... forgettable.

i mean,

HOW COULD YOU LEAVE ME ALONE
LEFT INSIDE WITH NO-ONE HOME
HOW COULD YOU HAVE LEFT ME ALIVE
WITH ALL THE FEAR INSIDE

is cool and all, but it basically summed up most other break-up songs out there.

The title, left alone, is also a bit generic.

Some advice here, poetry/lyrics is ment to be remembered, to have meaning. If you're just gonna run through what thousands and millions of songwriters have written before you, then you're nothing special.

A professor of mine once said that "in poetry, if everyone is going this way, you want to be going THAT way."

I hope this helps...

Of course, again, just my 2 cents worth and not meaning to offend...
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